The Writing Desk

Alright, let's see how this goes.

LET ME MAKE THIS CLEAR!

This story is first and foremost an experiment in descriptive writing. I DID NOT HAVE A SET PLOT IN MIND WHEN I BEGAN IT, AND NOW I FEEL THE NEED TO MAKE IT NOT A SHORT STORY. As such, this will take a veryyy different track than it did in the song. I want to try to become a better descriptive writer, so I am putting the characters into a couple of different situations. I'm trying to keep this as close to character as possible too, though. DON'T EXPECT THIS TO FOLLOW THE SONG.

I will first answer the questions that basically everyone has asked, then I am going to pick apart a few reviews given by one person, the reviews that have made me so amazingly pissed off with everyone and have made my motivation diiiiiiieee.

Here we go!

Q: What is the setting of this story? (Time period, country, city, etc.)
A: I don't really know! To be perfectly honest with you, this is one hundred percent (100%) AU. Alternate Universe. SO au in fact, that it does not take place on this PLANET. Goodness. The time period is meant to be around the 1930s-50s, so imagine that sort of garb, lifestyle, etc. Also, it is meant to be in the World War II era, thus the conflict and battles and stuff. Now, while they are living in the American equivelant of my au, and America wasn'r really bombed or attacked directly in WWII (I think, right?) Let's just pretend. I'm not going to be naming city names, and if I do and they're like 'New York' or 'Chicago' or anything like that, then they're not like the real ones. As a matter of fact, if I name city names, I'm going to make them 'St. John's' or 'Gander' or something. Something that I'm sure only I would know, hahaha.

Q: How old is everyone in this story?
A: Again, AU, so I'm bumping up Edward's age to 19. hahahahaa. It probably doesn't make a big difference in the long run, but Bella and Emmett are 19, and Alice is 18. :) she's not little sister like 6 year old. Don't worry, hahah

Q: Why wasn't Bella wondering about her brother and sister and their safety?
A: Okay. Imagine that you just woke up and discovered that not only your city was destroyed, but you and your siblings were nearly killed, and saved by vampires. That's a pretty radical difference isn't it? Wouldn't you need a little time to adjust to the fact that you can never eat cake, lettuce, chocolate, apples, anything ever again? I would. And, if there were blood curdling screeches coming from all corners of the house, I'd be even more shaken up than anything. Bella has good reason for doing what she does. She isn't so heartless as to forget her siblings; she's worried, yes,  but she's also just gone through a life changing event.

Q: Why can't Bella remember the pain of the transformation?
A: This isn't anything to do with her memory, it's just me. I'd imagine that coming out of days of pain would feel like such a relief that it'd be hard to imagine the pain anymore. It'd be more like a memory, or a dull throb than anything.

Q: Wasn't Bella's transformation a bit fast?
A: It was leading in to the third day, and she'd lost a lot of blood. So in my mind in makes sense for the venom to spread a lot more quickly, does it not? Also, the difference in their changes is due to Rosalie and Edward trying to heal Alice and Emmett, but Alice was too far gone, and Emmett begged to be changed. I can't remember if this was answered, but I'll mention it again in the future. Actually, I think it was coming up!

Q: Wahwah update soon?
A: No.
Hahaha. Please, don't ask me to update soon. It's not going to work. OF COURSE I AM going to finish all of my stories, but I generally write the ones I have immediate inspiration for. Then, if I don't have a stroke of genious for one of them, I look at the one that hasn't been updated in the longest amount of time and try to finish that one up to post. Patience is a virtuuue.

OKAY. NOW I AM GOING TO LOOK AT THREE REVIEWS BY ONE PERSON WHICH REALLY FRUSTRATED ME AND MADE ME WANT TO STOP WRITING THIS STORY. And yes, I AM going to finish this story, don't worry guys. But, if the person who wrote these actually see's this, please read the whole thing through. Nothing would frustrate me more to have you attacking these responses. keep an open mind, hmm?

#1 Review for Chapter 2

Hmm...I'm not sure how to take this. From your description of the outfit Bella put on, I suppose that this is present day (tall furry boots?), but I don't get a total feel for where she lives, why it was being bombed, etc. From the first chapter, my mind immediately shot to the Blitz, but apparently I was wrong.

Also...Bella seems to be taking the fact that she's a vampire way too easily. Like, "Oh, I'm a mythical creature now? Okay!" No, I don't think it would happen like that. And you can explain it however you see it, and say that, "Well Bella's very accepting," or something like that, but it doesn't make up for the fact that, in the story, she just jumps up and is totally okay with being a vampire, and that was rather unrealistic.

Otherwise, I'm intriguied. A little frustrated, but intrigued. And 'one' in French is 'un,' not 'une.' For shame, Canadian! :-P Although I suppose it's rude to assume that all Canadians speak French fluently. Anyways...to the next chapter. :)


Q:From your description of the outfit Bella put on, I suppose that this is present day (tall furry boots?)

A: Where I come from, Newfondland Canada, Wayyy back in the day women used to wear nice little dresses and skirts and the like. My grandmother has some nice pictures of herself in black and white when my mom was younger. In the winter, they'd wear thick tights like leggings, and probably woollen socks on top if they were being practical, slippers at least. The boots that they wore were big, and lined in fur. More than likely not, seal fur.

Q: but I don't get a total feel for where she lives, why it was being bombed, etc.

A: Answered.

Q:Bella seems to be taking the fact that she's a vampire way too easily. Like, "Oh, I'm a mythical creature now? Okay!" No, I don't think it would happen like that. And you can explain it however you see it, and say that, "Well Bella's very accepting," or something like that, but it doesn't make up for the fact that, in the story, she just jumps up and is totally okay with being a vampire, and that was rather unrealistic

A: Well why not? Bella had nothing left for her in her human life. Her parents were dead. The idea of becoming a mythical creature was probably a better one to accept than; oh hello your city was bombed and destroyed and now you're dead. If I woke up from a night mare like the one she'd been through before her change I'd probably say 'okay' too. Not to mention, Bella deals with it in her own way, in her head, when she's by herself, but this is the second chapter you reviewed, so I guess you didn't get to see what else happened before you jumped to conclusions. I mean, Bella upon discovering Edward was a vampire said 'oh cool' and went on her way, did she not?

And before the 'wah wah she was in love with him' comes into effect, that same extra emotion can be applied to the fact that her entire family was dead or dying.

#2 Review for Chapter 3

Huh...I really don't understand this. "Mother and "Father"? Furry boots? What time is this? What war is this? And now they're looters, too? Hmm...not really redeeming yourself...

Q:"Mother and "Father"?
A: Are you kidding me? In reference to Charlie and Renee? In a time period such as this? Parent's did not divorce as commonly back then, and they were much more respected than nowadays.

Q: Furry boots?
A: Answered

Q:What time is this? What war is this?
A: Both answered

Q:And now they're looters, too?
A: Okay. May I point out that in Twilight it is said that half of their fortune is due to Alice being able to see trends in the stock market. Without Alice, half of their fortune is gone, essentially. Sure, Carlisle has his resources and I'm certain he's filthy rich by now, but when you suddenly have three extra people in the house and you need clothes and various other things fast, you take what you can get.

#3 Review for Chapter 4

Okay, I really don't get where you're coming from on this one. Not only am I baffled by the time period (either the technology or the fashion or the vernacular is out of place, I don't know which), I am baffled by how you're trying to proceed with the plot, and not pleasantly. I didn't like how Bella kind of went about her business, totally accepting vampirism, and ignoring her brother's and sister's screams until this chapter, where you kind of threw it in as an afterthought, and not in a good way at that. Bella's character is not as selfish as you depicted her in this, and if you wanted her personality to be different, you needed to make that clear from the beginning (that she was not as good of a person as she is in the books). I'm all up for making characters do what you want them to, but consistency is necessary. With AU's that are so exceptionally different from the books, you need to treat it like you're writing your own books, and basically building characters and relationships ESPECIALLY up from the ground. Now you know I'm one of your biggest fans, but I am incredibly frustrated and upset by this fic. :((

Q: Not only am I baffled by the time period (either the technology or the fashion or the vernacular is out of place, I don't know which), I am baffled by how you're trying to proceed with the plot, and not pleasantly. I didn't like how Bella kind of went about her business, totally accepting vampirism, and ignoring her brother's and sister's screams until this chapter, where you kind of threw it in as an afterthought, and not in a good way at that.
A: Okay. time period, fashion, accepting vampirism, all answered. Ignoring her brother's and sister's screams, addressed in chapter five. Guys, when I say patience is a virtue, I really really mean it! I've had these five chapters written for a long time, so it makes more sense to me. But this is DESCRIPTIVE WRITING, and I am not going to include every little detail, I want to concentrate on the mood, the atmosphere, the tone.

Q:Bella's character is not as selfish as you depicted her in this
A: I certainly didn't plan on making her this selfish! She's spent her entire life taking care of her brother and sister, and now she's the one who needs taking care of, that's all.

Q:With AU's that are so exceptionally different from the books, you need to treat it like you're writing your own books, and basically building characters and relationships ESPECIALLY up fromthe ground.
A: Well, I've said time and time again that this story is radically AU. But apparantly no one is listening to me.

I think that's it for now. As more are asked I'll answer them and add them in. But I mean it guys, patience is necessary. If you don't like it, then stop reading it and go read someone else's fanfiction or go read other ones of mine. I have short stories, full length stories, in progress stories, and even FOUR MORE that I am planning on posting, so chilllllllll.